A story about a secret agent who worked at a company to gather some informations in Medan...
His name is Phil,
He went to the mall early and sat in Starbucks reading the newspaper and drinking a cappuccino...
at the same time, he looked at the FELICE jewellery shop in the opposite of STARBUCK, which is the richest jewerelly shop in Sun Plaza. When the shop opened, he started to go into the shop with a girl he met in Starbucks cafe. He promised to buy a diamond for the girl. She is a sweet girl, falling in love with Phil in the first sight, but she didn't know that Phil only wanted to use her for his job. She went with Phil to the FELICE shop. Phil asked her to look for the diamond she wanted, while he tried to stick the small camera into the shop. He's sure no one realized it because it's size is too small about 0,001 mm. (Corrected)
A story about a secret agent who worked at a company to gather some informations (information is uncountable - some information, a piece of information, a few pieces of information) in Medan...
His name is Phil, He went to the mall early and sat in Starbucks reading the newspaper and drinking a cappuccino...
at the same time, he looked for (look for something to find it, look at something when you know where it is - do you mean watched? what's the difference) the FELICE jewellery shop in the opposite (you tell me) of STARBUCK, which is the richest jewerelly shop in Sun Plaza. When the shop opened, he started to go into the shop with one of the girl (how many girls did he meet) he met in the (Starbucks is a name so you don't need an article) Starbuck cafe. He promised to buy a diamond for the girl(nice guy? - stupid girl?). She is a sweet girl, falling in love with phil in the first sight (fantastic), but she didn't know that phil (he may be a bad man, but I think he still deserves a capital for his name) only wanted to use her for his job. She went with phil to the FELICE shop. Phil asked her to look for the diamond she wanted, while he tried to stick the small camera (hmmm, why should this be 'a small camera'?) into the shop. He sure no one realized it because the size is too small about 0,001 mm. (This sentence is a bit whacky, don't forget about subjects and verbs).
Thanks, whoever did this. Pass the story on to another member of your team. I want to know what happens next. Well done so far!
His name is Phil,
He went to the mall early and sat in Starbucks reading the newspaper and drinking a cappuccino...
at the same time, he looked at the FELICE jewellery shop in the opposite of STARBUCK, which is the richest jewerelly shop in Sun Plaza. When the shop opened, he started to go into the shop with a girl he met in Starbucks cafe. He promised to buy a diamond for the girl. She is a sweet girl, falling in love with Phil in the first sight, but she didn't know that Phil only wanted to use her for his job. She went with Phil to the FELICE shop. Phil asked her to look for the diamond she wanted, while he tried to stick the small camera into the shop. He's sure no one realized it because it's size is too small about 0,001 mm. (Corrected)
A story about a secret agent who worked at a company to gather some informations (information is uncountable - some information, a piece of information, a few pieces of information) in Medan...
His name is Phil, He went to the mall early and sat in Starbucks reading the newspaper and drinking a cappuccino...
at the same time, he looked for (look for something to find it, look at something when you know where it is - do you mean watched? what's the difference) the FELICE jewellery shop in the opposite (you tell me) of STARBUCK, which is the richest jewerelly shop in Sun Plaza. When the shop opened, he started to go into the shop with one of the girl (how many girls did he meet) he met in the (Starbucks is a name so you don't need an article) Starbuck cafe. He promised to buy a diamond for the girl(nice guy? - stupid girl?). She is a sweet girl, falling in love with phil in the first sight (fantastic), but she didn't know that phil (he may be a bad man, but I think he still deserves a capital for his name) only wanted to use her for his job. She went with phil to the FELICE shop. Phil asked her to look for the diamond she wanted, while he tried to stick the small camera (hmmm, why should this be 'a small camera'?) into the shop. He sure no one realized it because the size is too small about 0,001 mm. (This sentence is a bit whacky, don't forget about subjects and verbs).
Thanks, whoever did this. Pass the story on to another member of your team. I want to know what happens next. Well done so far!
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