Continued by Sherli
That's what his boss did when his boss has not enough people to be his secret agent...
As long as he remembered, his boss has looked after and taught him many kinds of martial arts. So he could use Phil as his secret agent, that he could trust the most.
Back to thepresent, he phoned Kim although he didn't want to. They just talked for a moment although they hadn't met for a long time. And at the end, Kim told him to ask Tommy whom she received the glasses from. Tommy was a spy who worked in an illegal company.
"Oh Yeah! I've got new way! It should be better to ask Tom than Kim.. It needs to be easy.." Phil thought.
Hhhmmm... but it seemed that he forgot his phone number. And then he wrecked all the sides of his apartment. "Thank You God, you always help me," he smiled then called Tommy. They made a meeting in a secret place *to think that their conversation would be bugged by someone, they didn't talked about it by phone*. After they met, Phil must took his fate which has been given by God, Tom couldn't help him. It is because Tom was not a spy now in his life, he had became a good guy. (Corrected)
That's what his boss did when his boss has not enough people to be his secret agent...
As long as he remembered, his boss has looked after and taught him many kinds of martial arts. So he could use Phil as his secret agent, that he could trust the most.
Back to thepresent, he phoned Kim although he didn't want to. They just talked for a moment although they hadn't met for a long time. And at the end, Kim told him to ask Tommy whom she received the glasses from. Tommy was a spy who worked in an illegal company.
"Oh Yeah! I've got new way! It should be better to ask Tom than Kim.. It needs to be easy.." Phil thought.
Hhhmmm... but it seemed that he forgot his phone number. And then he wrecked all the sides of his apartment. "Thank You God, you always help me," he smiled then called Tommy. They made a meeting in a secret place *to think that their conversation would be bugged by someone, they didn't talked about it by phone*. After they met, Phil must took his fate which has been given by God, Tom couldn't help him. It is because Tom was not a spy now in his life, he had became a good guy. (Corrected)
Ok, this is very good. You have introduced a new character which is great. Why did he quit the spying game? What does he think about Phil?
There is some great language in here but there are a few problems with the tenses (grrr!). I know that you can fix the tense problems yourself so I'm going to highlight them in your story in red and then you can edit this post and correct them yourself!
Back to the present, he phoned Kim although he doesn't want to. They just talked for a moment although didn't meet for a long time they hadn't met for a long time. And at the end, Kim told him to asked (to ask - grrr infinitive!!!) Tommy, whom she received the glasses from. Tommy is a spy who worked in an illegal company. "Oh Yeah! I've got new way! It shouldwill be better to ask Tom than Kim.. It must be easy.."(hmmm, this is not wrong, though it seems a bit awkward. I think 'it needs to be easy') Phil thought. Hhhmmm... but it seems that he forgot his (this is a bit confusing - too many pronouns) phone number. And then he wreck all the sides (do you mean 'walls'?) of his apartment. "Thank You God, you always help me," he smile then call Tommy. They made a meeting in a secret place *to think that their conversation would be bugged by someone, they didn't talked about it by phone*. After they met, Phil must took his fate which has been given by God (accept his fate), Tom can't help him. It is because Tom is not a spy now in his life, he has became a good guy.
As I said before, this story is great. It is a fantastic effort from all of you. When am I going to get an installment from Jemmy? How about setting him up with another gripping cliffhanger, Cindy?
Well done guys!
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